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Johnny (Season 7 Runner Up)
Johnny's Submission
Final Score Breakdown:
Communication 16/20
Creativity 18/20
Total 34/40
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Prophetor is a strong name. ‘Old Congress’ is a great example of showing not telling through the use of names. UBI and abolishing full-time employment through revenue from robot tax is a fun idea. The motivations were interesting and the “We were wrong” briefing ties it all together well and was a good twist.
“We’re going extinct” is a captivating opening line, and I love the dramatic but not melodramatic writing style, but it does slightly jar with the premise of it being a classified briefing to the Secretary of Defense. Similarly, the wide use of contractions makes it less formal - you can get away with the occasional “it’s”, but less so with “we’ve” and “we’re”.
20k years is an insanely long time - language, fashion, and customs will have changed dramatically in such a long period of time. Would be nice to see glimpses of that. Small comment but why does Doctor Humbracker being pale make him more recognisable as an intruder, and how does that link to him being tall (“as a result”)?
Writing Challenge:
Imagine it is the year 2495 (the future) and that civilization has somehow invented a new device that allows anyone to retrieve information from the future before the year 2500 (before the far future). Although this new device always accurately predicts the exact details about any event in time, it can only tell users what exactly will happen before the year 2500. A spy technician sent from the far-future is tasked with secretly correcting the code in the device by the year 2500 so then it may continue to function properly until humanity’s extinction. Your challenge is to write a 2000-word classified-style document written from the perspective of the people in the far future who employed the spy, clearly outlining the benefits and impacts of continuing the programming of the device and why it is ultimately decided that the device must remain until humanity’s extinction despite the apparent chaotic, emotional, and existential crises that people face when using the device in the future (2100-2500). Provide compelling case studies that stand for and against the usage of the device.
Helpful Timeline for this Writing Challenge
Present (2024-2100) > Future (2100-2500) > Far-Future (2500-)
